Edison Story (Flash Fiction)

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Flash Fiction #108: This is a combination of two stories (two true stories) but I changed the location and the profession and certain details so that the characters are not really recognizable.


“You are having an affair with my fiancee.” Rana says.

“No. You are having an affair with my fiancee. He’s mine.” Fani says.

The two women stare at each other. And of course they are talk about Bo, who is supposed to be here, but hasn’t arrived yet.

“Bo really wants to marry me. You forced yourself on him. He told me so yesterday.” Rana says. And it is no surprise that Fani makes the same claim. Each says that she has been preparing for the wedding for months. Money is spent, relatives informed, friends invited–all for the big day.

Bo finally arrives. He looks haggard and out of breath. He’s very handsome, which means his attributes fit the male beauty parameters of the modern world. Actually Asians didn’t subscribe to this standard for thousands of years. The height and the muscle tone had not existed in Asian psyche until after WWII. And although the beauty standard has frustrated many, it’s very much to Bo’s advantage. Bo is probably the most handsome man in the Asian immigrant community in Edison, New Jersey. Most of the men are so burdened with working, studying, and paying off mortgage that they rarely pay attention to their wardrobe or hair. However Bo looks fine and elegant, wearing expensive clothes. His demeanor is so different from everybody else, often very relaxed. However he cannot relaxed right now with two fiancees in front of him.

Bo is trying his best on damage control. Actually for months, he has been trying to persuade one of them to drop the idea of marriage, but to no avail. Actually his effort in dissuasion has only convinced the two women to hasten their preparation for the wedding and become more vigilant of Bo’s whereabouts. They love him too much. He is too handsome to be given up.

Actually Bo looks like he is having a nervous breakdown, but the two women are now too engrossed in their battle of each other to care about Bo’s health. Shouts and yells and crying and accusations–for a while all hell breaks loose. And finally the three of them wrestle each other onto the floor as if they were having an alcohol infused brawl in a bar.

Then suddenly, Bo just lies there, not moving. At first, the two women continues to fight, not realizing what is happening to him. Then Rana screams and Fani freezes–Bo’s probably dead.

An ambulance is called and Bo is rushed to the hospital. The two women, each claiming to be the fiancee, startle the EMT crew.

“Well, what the heck. You can both get on the ambulance.” One of the crew says.

During their ride to the hospital, Bo’s cell phone rings in his pocket, and the two women battle for the right to get the phone. Rana is quicker and she gets the phone. However she hesitates to answer it and Fani mocks her, “Why don’t you answer? Probably this is the third fiancee Bo’s having. Are you afraid of competitions? Are you ready for more?”


The second part of the story can be find here.

15 thoughts on “Edison Story (Flash Fiction)

  1. I donโ€™t agree I really liked your story. Individuality and mixing things up is wonderful. You write great stories. I am trying to get where I can write a good story. Big hugs and love my friend. โค๏ธ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿฆ‹

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      1. I am so glad. You are a lovely writer. You are a better story teller than I am. I am learning and I am blessed to have a mentor now. Please donโ€™t doubt your work. You add so much to the community my kind friend. Sending you lots of love. โค๏ธ๐Ÿฆ‹๐ŸŒน

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        1. Love your continued encouragement and support. And thank you for the praise. I am learning too and I am happy to share. We can be mentor to each other, LOL. Yes, I doubt my work all the time and it is frustrating. Thanks to your sweet words, I continue. All the love and hugs to you, my dear friend. โค๏ธ๐Ÿฆ‹๐ŸŒน

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        2. Absolutely I would love that. You are very intelligent and interesting. You do write lovely. I learn something from almost everyone I follow. I can tell you are a very hard worker. I admire that. Thank you for your love and hugs and sending some back and flowers too. ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿฆ‹๐ŸŒน๐Ÿ’๐ŸŒป๐ŸŒบ๐ŸŒธ Have a wonderful weekend. Love Joni

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        3. Thank you for the praise. Often I feel like a cat chasing its tail, going in an endless circle without any advancement. Yes, I am forever chasing “tale” but can’t get the effect I have in my mind. LOL. Thank you for your continuous sweet encouragement. Have a wonderful weekend. Love and hugs and good wishes. ๐Ÿค—๐Ÿฆ‹๐ŸŒน๐Ÿ’๐ŸŒป๐ŸŒบ๐ŸŒธ

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